Thursday, February 25, 2010
Weekend Writing 6 - Jessie, Eric, TJ, Lauren
About the ending, I cut off a couple paragraphs about whats happend with riding since Sam died. I don't know if its stronger without them or if I should have some follow up.
Wednesday, February 24, 2010
Weekend 6 (actually project writing)- Marmot Gladiators
Were we still getting out? Hell yeah, hell yeah we were.
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Comment on the writing for what it is: half of a larger piece that I haven't finished yet. How is the setup working? I have a fear that the setup for these pieces where we are paddling to wherever and I narrate about our troubles is boring or otherwise un-necessary.
Weekend Writing 6- group uno
Rest Stop (WW6)- Jessie, Lauren, Eric, T.J.
Tuesday, February 23, 2010
Telescope Eyes (Linus, Margo, Joe, Sammy)
Monday, February 22, 2010
Experience [WW#6, Marmot Gladiators]
Traffic cameras watched my SUV crawl ten miles per hour under the speed limit down Chester Avenue, lit intermittently by streetlights and the colored tint of traffic lights. I pulled into the gas station, a square just large enough to house four gas pumps and a convenience store, hanging at the edge of a precipice into I-90, surrounded by conifers, grass, and tar.
After twisting the knob to turn off the headlights, I hastily donned my hoodie and my heavy coat, making sure the doors remain locked until I was ready to get out. Hurriedly, I slipped the credit card into the pump and deftly shoved it back into my wallet, which I tucked beneath my layers, and immediately started pumping. I rested my back against the white car door, my feet pivoted on the raised concrete of the pump.
Two gallons. The air evaporated out of my mouth like exhaust. Hearing a squeak, my arms tensed, and I jerked my head aside. A man with a black hood lifted from the down puffs of his red coat scrubbed my windshield using the bright red squeegee affixed to the side of each gas pump. Lit by the streetlights looming above the gas station, his six-foot frame seemed faceless.
Wednesday, February 10, 2010
Weekend Writing #5...I don't even know which group I'm in (Evan M is in it)...
My gas light blinks. Pale and yellow. Pathetic. There’s a BP about five hundred yards down the road, so I shouldn’t be worried about running dry. But I am. I’m always worried about running dry.
SOM Center Road at 7:50 AM. Mothers sit all high and holy in the thrones of their SUVS, which are even less sexy when caked in thin layers of sidewalk salt residue. I generalize. They are eager to drop off the kids. Ready to get rid of them. Hair appointments, private workouts, and coffee with friends add volume to their schedules, and everything’s unavoidable when it’s written in a planner. Suburban congestion is a byproduct of mom’s obligations. I’m all too familiar.
Weekend Writing 5 Group UNO
Troy- WW5 (Eric, TJ, Lauren, Jessie)
It's not Me, It's You [WR #5 [LS, JL, TJC, EW]]
If you're curious, these are the three songs I referenced in this piece:
Kill the Director - The Wombats
Map of the Problematique - Muse
The Trapeze Swinger - Iron and Wine
Tuesday, February 9, 2010
Best There Is (Linus, Joe, Margo, Sammy)
We’re supposed to be like fucking superheroes or something. I’m twenty. How the hell am I supposed to be a superhero? Especially when I’m sitting here doing shit for my country. Hell, I wish I were a superhero. Then maybe I could actually do something for America. I’d take those terrorist bastards out in fourteen seconds if I could get my hands on them. Fuck protocol, fuck strategy, and fuck reality. I’m a goddamn superhero, damn it.
Best There Is: Hakuna Matata! What a wonderful phrase Hakuna Matata! Ain't no passing craze It means no worries for the rest of your days It's our problem-free philosophy
Hell yeah I’m a Disney kid. And there’s still nothing better than Disney wisdom. Hakuna Matata? Truest thing I ever heard. Nothing better.
WW 5 - jessie eric tj
I was planning on using this in my project.
I thought five minutes was incredibly early, but we still had to stand in the back. Well, I sat against the wall, my legs tucked in sort of an awkward half-Indian style as to preserve some sense of dignity in my skirt while keeping the aisle unobstructed. The seats were taken up by the 2,300 other high school students tapping the toes of their western-business appropriate shoes and fidgeting with the buttons on their borrowed blazers and suit-coats. Everyone’s chest (except for my friend who staunchly defended that her outfit was “not a nametag wearing” one) was emblazoned with a laminated card declaring their name and school, and the country and committee they would be representing. Eyes darted around the room, scoping out competition. And the opposite sex. Ok, so, mostly the opposite sex. And it was disappointing.
A full pitcher of water sat in front of each of the eight people behind the dark brown dais. It seemed like a waste. My feet hurt already and it was the first hour of three whole days in heels. I poked my standing, non-nametagged friend and asked her for the time. They were late in starting.KTN: WW5- Group Uno
-I want to start more in the present time then go to the past and have some flash backs but I am not sure whether or not they're in the order that makes the most sense/is the most effective. Advice?...
This past summer I go to Bridget’s graduation party. Her father was a child of twelve, so relatives are completely scattered throughout her lawn that lies beneath the cheap tent that’s set up. Conversations between Bridget and I usually consist of her telling me that we should hang out soon—but we never do. Or one of us will say, “we should hang out in the summer every day and play outside like we used to”—but it never happens. After a few months after Kevin’s death, my dad didn’t want my sister and I calling her constantly anymore to play. He figured it was silly for us to always invite her over when she was only inviting her other friends—ones who don’t remind her or her mother of the years her brother was sick, to her house. Bridget glides out of her back door into her deep green lawn, wearing a bright yellow dress. She politely greets my family and proceeds to find her friends from school.
From behind me I hear a squeal: “Sweetheart! You look beautiful!”
Mrs. Neff greets me with a hug and wide smile. A few of Bridget’s aunts are clumped around her.
“This is [author], Bridget’s friend.” She rests her hand on my back, tilts her head towards mind. The edges of her eyes wrinkle upwards and she gives me a gentle expression. “They grew up together.”
Monday, February 8, 2010
How To Make A Happily Ever After (W.W.5 - Group 1)
7. A major point of the plot should be that the attributes addressed in number 5 will cause the girl to disappoint her father.
8. Create a touching moment between father and daughter involving the girl’s dead mother. For example, have the father give his daughter some sort of trinket that belonged to her mother or have him say “she would have been very proud of you.” Under no circumstances should this be a major point in the plot, it should be a short scene that you assume your audience will not remember at the end of the movie. You will put this in the movie under a heartfelt obligation to put it in and for no other reason.
Weekend Writing 5 (Group UNO)
“Connecting…” It was a picture of a book I bought her when we were in middle school. It had girly-curly font on the front and she told me it sucked. It was the worst book she ever read. She still makes fun of me for it sometimes. In the message she wrote, “And the Holy grail of our friendship…”
That was a good one. I didn’t have good ones. I really wished I did. I really wished I could find that stupid bookmark with the stupid salt and peppershakers on it but I had been stupid and careless and I lost it. Now I was looking through things that I haven’t looked at since I stuffed them in the pockets I was currently pulling them out of.
I found a note she’d written on my class schedule signed with a peace sign + a heart. I took a picture and sent it, no message.
She texted back, “Damn, girl. Clean your room!”
I didn’t respond. I took a picture of a collection of post-its she’d wrote notes on to me and sent it, no message. I shook my head feeling stupid and careless. I rushed to find something else to send.
WW5 - Linus, Margo, Sammy
Sunday, February 7, 2010
Group 1 Weekend Writing 5 (Saints superbowl champs woooo)
Conditioning [Marmot Gladiators, WR 5]
5 Read Claiming the White Forest who's events occur approximately thirteen hours after those of Conditioning.
6 Unlike the invasion of Native American lands where pioneers sought to rip gold from the bosom of the earth, we were making a deposit. They should have been happy.
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Light Patterns, WW5, Marmot Gladiators
Sunday morning. My dad ordered me outside to clear the snow. I stepped barefoot into green rubber boots with soft fur lining on the inside that sat beside the garage door. I danced on my toes swiftly, making my way toward the boots, and deftly leaped into the shoes to minimize the transfer of heat with the frigid concrete garage floor. I wiggled my toes in the empty space within. With the green plastic shaft of a snow shovel pressed against the rubber grip of my bright red nylon-shelled gloves, I stepped out of the garage and squinted, assaulted by the pure, natural light reflecting off the fresh, glittery snowfall, just as I had as a child defiantly gazing into the sun against the advice of elders, seeing the shape of the landscape and the position of the horizon in scarlet streaks during each blink. Those light patterns were more precise than my blurred vision without contacts. I spent a half hour shoveling and relocating snow until I reformed the psychedelic outlines into a channel that cars could pass through.
When I stepped back into the shade of the garage, instantly, the entire world filtered into two tones. The window emitted a red glow, while the dark corner of the garage appeared green. I kept myself from blinking to maximize the duration of the phenomenon. After slipping the boots off, I stepped back inside, and started to take off some layers of clothes. My eyes began to sting. The entire room shifted slowly from red to green. A cloud must have shaded the sun. I walked into the family room, looking at the emerald piano in front of the large, ruby windows, forming a gradient of colors that blurred the outline of the piano. My eyes were bitterly dry by the time I stepped into the dark green basement. I blinked a few times, and the dichromatic world faded into the full spectrum. The two colors were divorced.
Thursday, February 4, 2010
Stuff - TJ, Eric, Jessie, Lauren
On the desk sits my Hewlett-Packard Laptop, a stack of Bass Player magazines, a Burton snowboard catalog, a porcelain piggy bank in the shape of a small immigrant boy given to me by my great-grandfather, a miniature basketball hoop, three pieces of Cleveland Indians memorabilia, not to mention the odd trinkets that don’t belong in my room, period. This would include the glass dolphin with chameleon eyes and filled with water, the glass elephant filled with wood chips, and the dancing cactus. Especially the dancing cactus. This toy cactus wears a purple and orange sombrero, aviator sunglasses, and has orange feet. When poked, the cactus gyrates back and forth while singing, “I am a cactus! I am a cactus! I like nothing very much! I am a cactus! I am a cactus! HAHA! Be careful if you touch!” in a hopelessly poor recreation of an Hispanic accent. Why this cactus is the centerpiece of my desk is a good and slightly disturbing question, but, nevertheless, there it sits, exerting its dominion over the wood chip elephant, chameleon/dolphin, and immigrant boy.
"Ambulance vs. Ambulance....SAme group as Evan M...
Wednesday, February 3, 2010
Cole- TJ, Eric, Lauren, Jessie (week 4)
WW #4, Group Uno
WR#4 (EW, JL, LS, TJC)
The campers are somewhere in the middle of a 25-day canoeing expedition down the Riviere de Rupert, which begins at Lac Mistassini and ends in the Baie de Rupert, which empties into James Bay, and indirectly, the Hudson Bay. The Rupert is a businesslike river. It moves very quickly and doesn’t bother with complicated meanders or sharp turns, flowing nearly straight westward. It has gained fame for having some of the most deadly and intimidating sets of rapids in the world. The campers, of course, portage around these most dangerous sets, balancing their canoes on their heads and trudging over rain-slick rocks and roots. Getting around the sets can be a commitment of two miles or more and the overland hiking is especially exhausting. Before seeking refuge from the storm, the campers had just completed a particularly arduous portage around the last of four sets of rapids. It was around these rapids that the sheer power of the Rupert came into view for them. The sets dominate the senses so completely that it is impossible to focus on anything but not falling in. Whitewater akin to what is found on the Rupert is the stuff of legends—the kind of water that will grab hold of travelers and never let them go. It inspires terror, and yet, the campers have ridden 18 hours in a van just to get as close to the river as they can, and maybe “shoot” some of them—they say “shoot” because it’s easier to say than “barely maintain control of the boat while hurtling down the set at unhealthy speeds”—if they can manage it.
WW4- Group UNO!
“Isn’t she adorable? Her name is Cosette; my husband and I named her after a character from Les Miserables, our favorite book.”
She smiles triumphantly and slides the phone back into her pocket. Now she is ready to begin.
Dr. Waite begins the incision into the patient’s pale skin.
Each cut is delicate, as she pauses before making her next move. My stomach tightens and I glance over at Nate and ask him if he thinks it’s gross so far. He just shrugs his shoulders, as he’s seen it all before. After Dr. Waite slices the patient’s chest open, she goes on about the puppy:
“…and as soon as I held him it was love at first sight. But my husband will be the type that will tell our little darling ‘Well, I would let you do this, but mommy said no…’ We’ve figured out a schedule for when to walk the dogs. He will in the mornings, and…”
Tuesday, February 2, 2010
http://www.succeedsocially.com/eyecontact (group UNO writing 4)
“It's easier to make eye contact with people who don't intimidate you vs. people who do. Like most people, I get more flustered looking an attractive or high-status person in the eye compared to chatting to my parents or my friends. You could tell yourself that it's okay if you can't make eye contact with more intimidating people right off the bat, and that you'll work on that later.”
In about third grade I started to make a sincere effort to look my teachers in the eye, mainly, my math teacher. She didn’t like me. She told my mom that I never looked her in the eye and that it was rude. Her, with her big magnifying lenses that made her eyes look abnormally large for her wrinkly head, and with her dull red scraggly hair with the grey just pushing out in chunks from her scalp, clumping like balls of string to the sides of her face. Sometimes she wore lipstick that went above her lips and I’d watch them move when she yelled at me for not looking at her.
My mom said it was easy, look people right between the eyes, at that patch of skin above the bridge of their nose and below the forehead.
I tried, I honestly did, but it was hard when I had been in the habit of turning my desk sideways so it was facing the wall instead of the board. She yelled at me for that too. I didn’t really see anything wrong with it.
WW4 group "uno" (Jacqueline, Julia, Ana, Evan)
Subject: Performance Review
The purpose of this message is to evaluate your recent performance in the workplace.
Sanford, I am unimpressed with how you’ve been performing. When you bag groceries, you tend to help a customer who already has someone bagging for them instead of helping a customer who doesn’t have one. This is not okay, especially because you like to chat with the bagger you’re helping. I would like to remind you of the rule we have about bagging: there should be no conversation going on between you and a cashier and/or bagger unless it involves the customer. This is so the customer doesn’t feel left out. I also heard about the incident that involved you sleeping in a motorized shopping cart while on the clock. It was an embarrassment to the store when a customer who needed the cart found you in it. This is something that should never happen again. You must be working at all times during your shift, and if you finish one task you must find another. Laziness is frowned upon and can quickly lead to termination of your employment. Please take some time before you go to work again to think about how you can improve as a professional.
(Sammy, Linus, Margo) WW4
Monday, February 1, 2010
Gang Aft A-Gley (WW #4, Marmot Gladiators)
I Don't Even Know Your Name (Group 1 W.W. 4)
Up Up and Away (Jessie Eric TJ Lauren)
Star Bright (Linus, Joe, Sammy, Margo)
But how could stars grant wishes? They do not understand their own mystery. They do not know enough to grant wishes and they can only guess what she is wishing for tonight. They know what it is. But they have learned from watching the world what it is to be too afraid to say what is truest. And so they will never know.