Unwillingly wandering through the woods with a group of strangers is a strange thing. “Wilderness.” The program named itself for inambiguity, clearly. Intended to help troubled and/or drug-addicted teens, the program holds true to its name. By thrusting said teen into the real, unforgiving natural world, they truly learn the truth in every interpretation of the word.
Tommy arrived early one April morning. Taken by force from his house at 4:00 am, as a “surprise intervention,” he was little short of tossed into a van and sent on his way. Accompanied only by the few belongings he managed to grab on his way out and a counselor who would soon be labeled as cause for his demise, the long drive commenced. That was back in Ohio, though. He was in Utah now. He had to keep reminding himself.
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I really liked the story and think that the content itself is interesting and makes it unique. It's great that you have so many details, especially since the story isn't your own and isn't from your perspective. Although the reader needs to know what the wilderness program is and why Tommy's there, the first paragraph may not be the strongest way to start off the story-- I find myself really interested in most of the paragraphs but not the first and second as much. There are a lot of unanswered questions (like, what exactly is his story of getting there and what's happened to him since) and not particularly much emotion. However, I can understand how it works because it seemed to have happened so fast and he didn't have much time to reflect. Lastly, I think you could introduce Jenny a little better. Overall, I really liked it and it's a really good piece, and I think that you could expand on Tommy's story a little more.
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